I wake up at 9 o¡ckolk :O! oooh no it's imposible!
I get up and then I dress with the firt clother I see.
I wash my face ans my teach ans I run very fast to the school.
When I arrive to the school my class was doing the maths exam and I say
to the teacher if I can do the exam and he say me "its no posible"...
and I can't do the exam.
When we go tp have lunch I se that I wen very fast
in the morning I don't take my lunch =S and I don't have mony to buy!
wen I retorn to the class the history teacher give us the note of the exam and i have a 4.5 nooo!=(=(!
I start cry but the teacher don't say me nothing!!
after I do some more class but was so burried and some of they I don't do the homework it was a really sad day.
Then wen she arrive at home she take the back and with the dinner becouse she have to bring to her grandmother house and she have to throw the garbage to the skip and wen she arrive to her granfmother house and give she the dinner she see that she confuse the backs and she throw the dinner to skip and she ruun very fast,but the back it was not to the skip.
Finaly after the very sad day wen she arrive at home she hear her mother: martaaaa, martaa,marta...and sundenly she opener eyes..
IT WAS A DREAM!!
3 comments:
maria...good thing this was only a dream!! What a nightmare of a day!!You express yourself well, but sometimes your spelling makes it dificult for me to guess what you are talking about. Go the the corrections page (English-on-Wheels-Corrections.blogspot.com
and EDIT your blog.
Keep writing !! Write a description of your bedroom.
maria...you just taught me a new word: "SKIP". It is the British equivilent of "DUMPSTER" in American English. The only time I ever used this word was to skip rope -which means to jump on one foot, so I was confused and thought you had made a spelling mistake!!
Maria, although your story happens in the past we sometimes use the present to "tell" the story as if it were happing now. This is correct. BUT you have to put EVERYTHING in the PRESENT.
Also, you start in the first person "I" and then you finish in the third person "She". You have to choose one or the other and use it all the time.
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